Origami slide editing

LI: to write a recount about making origami cranes.
In Writing we had to edit and check if our sentences made sense we had to edit some of our work because some of it didn't make sense or 2 sentences were joined together.

We had to check with Mr,Wong and see if our sentences were in order.
For the past few minutes I have been checking Sandra's DLO and seeing if it made sense.
She checked minds and I checked hers.